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Old 10-14-2006, 10:11 PM     #1 (permalink)
 
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The Unknown: Death Vs. Life

The Unknown: Death Vs. Life
I see your face
I hear your voice
I feel your touch
You hold me close
I calm down a little
I never thought it would be you
But I was wrong
You let me go
You back away
I look at you with confusion
You say your sorry and walk away
Suddenly the world around me goes dark
You fade away
I shiver in the cold
Im all alone
Surrounded by darkness
Is this the end
I hear a gunshot
Something falls to the ground
I know its you
But its too late
I never knew you felt that way
I thought we were just friends
I feel the blood
Not just mine, but yours
I lay my head on your chest
So this is how it ends
 
Old 10-15-2006, 11:19 AM     #2 (permalink)
 
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Wow really deep. good job!
 
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thank you....i try to make all my poems deep, so maybe people can understand the pain im trying to express
 
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thank you very much...it means a lot to me for people to be encouraging me so much when they've never even met me
 
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i like it,why not enter the poem comp
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good job hun...very talented
 
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